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    dots Submission Name: Prom Night Stereotype (((Almost)))dots
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    Author: painofthanatos
    Elite Ratio:    4.32 - 684/571/86
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       what happens when you go to another school's prom...


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    dotsProm Night Stereotype (((Almost)))dots
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    I feel your corduroy jacket surround me
    As your heels raise off the ground
    to make our lips connect
    Your hands glide down the back of my dress
    - I Catch My Breath -
    People walk by as we stand
    Directly below the street lamp
    In the middle of the sidewalk
    Yet hidden by the truck
    I can't forget the mischief in your eyes
    They way the sparkle
    ...I can't help but smile
    Only time wasn't on our side
    My dad's Nissan glides in
    Before we get the chance
    To be another Prom Night stereotype




    Submitted on 2006-05-05 23:12:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really good
    You captured the feelinmg one gets from their prom night
    I am not at all familer with that feeling as I did not go to my prom 20 years ago
    I look forward to reading more of your writes
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-05-06 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      well i like the whole angle of the prom night stereotype...though i can't say that i see anything that indicates you're at another school as your description says.


    fourth line You should be Your


    as far as writing advice, i would suggest using a bit more of imagination along with the descriptiveness of the nights events...i think if you spun off into the more imaginative side of a prom night stereotype, it would definitely be more interesting to read.

    take care
    | Posted on 2006-05-06 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]


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