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Prom Night Stereotype (((Almost)))

Author: painofthanatos
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what happens when you go to another school's prom...

Prom Night Stereotype (((Almost)))

I feel your corduroy jacket surround me
As your heels raise off the ground
to make our lips connect
Your hands glide down the back of my dress
- I Catch My Breath -
People walk by as we stand
Directly below the street lamp
In the middle of the sidewalk
Yet hidden by the truck
I can't forget the mischief in your eyes
They way the sparkle
...I can't help but smile
Only time wasn't on our side
My dad's Nissan glides in
Before we get the chance
To be another Prom Night stereotype

Submitted on 2006-05-05 23:12:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is really good
You captured the feelinmg one gets from their prom night
I am not at all familer with that feeling as I did not go to my prom 20 years ago
I look forward to reading more of your writes
God Bless
| Posted on 2006-05-06 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  well i like the whole angle of the prom night stereotype...though i can't say that i see anything that indicates you're at another school as your description says.

fourth line You should be Your

as far as writing advice, i would suggest using a bit more of imagination along with the descriptiveness of the nights events...i think if you spun off into the more imaginative side of a prom night stereotype, it would definitely be more interesting to read.

take care
| Posted on 2006-05-06 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]

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