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    dots Submission Name: Chancesdots
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    Author: totojane03
    ASL Info:    25- colorado springs
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 151/77/35
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 737
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 569



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    dots Chancesdots
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    I must be stuped,
    Lost and confused,
    For I am always feeling used,
    How do I say no,
    And go a sepret way,
    But it could hurt his feelings
    I must say,
    How do I Run and hide,
    I can't cause he is now
    apart of my life.
    I have given to many chances,
    And now he thinks this is
    A romance,
    Like a book wirtten but
    know one knows
    the truth on the pages,
    No one turns to page two
    to see if they feel the same about you
    and if there love is true.




    Submitted on 2006-05-06 15:10:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hi, i can totaly relate to this, i hated that feeling of being trapped in a relationship, it isnt good for iether of you, stay true no matta what u gotta do, it is only fair,
    nice write

    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      I can tell that you lknow what your writing about.....but i think that you could have been alittle more descriptive.

    When i first saw it, it looked at little short, but it does have a very big impact once you read it.

    I liked the way that you sort-of put his views into the poem.

    If this is really ahppening...oh honey! Im sorry..and i hpe it gets better!

    :)
    ~!~Epie~!~
    | Posted on 2006-05-07 00:00:00 | by CherStreisand0 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really good
    You speak great truth in this write
    To many people do jump right into Love because they like the feeling they are currently feeling without looking deeper into the person they truly believe is their soulmate
    What I really like about this one is how you referred life to a book and the answers come with time not right from the begining
    Very Nicely done
    God Bless
    Ron

    And Thank You for the recent addidition to your favorites
    I am Honored
    I have adding two new writes today I think you might like
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-06-27 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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