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    dots Submission Name: The Woodsdots
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    Author: In the Fire...
    ASL Info:    30/m/Orlando
    Elite Ratio:    2.13 - 46/121/63
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/
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    dotsThe Woodsdots
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    While wandering throught the forest,
    the woods all dry and dead,
    the wonderous thoughts of endless love
    that seem to fill my head.
    The wilderness with wolves in packs
    the run within the night,
    the wailes of the owl's might
    that seems to bring me fright.
    The forest hangs before me,
    the world all done in men's way.
    I look above and see the birds,
    remembering it's wednesday.




    Submitted on 2006-05-06 17:55:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Don't get lost ok?

    Pix
    | Posted on 2006-09-23 00:00:00 | by pixie_007 | [ Reply to This ]
      I agree with the bottom critique. A better ending would be nice. But I must say it is an excellent idea! The 6th line should start with 'That' not 'the'...

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    | Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by Ravensworth | [ Reply to This ]


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