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    dots Submission Name: Recoverydots
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    Author: necrotic
    ASL Info:    22/F/NY
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 198/94/33
    Words: 213
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Love
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    Description:
       This is for my Dad and his recovery.
    Not fully recovered yet, he has little use of his arm and his leg hasnt come back fully yet,
    but he is working on it and I have incedible faith that he will be back totally very soon.
    And if not,
    then at least he has his personality back fully.


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    dotsRecoverydots
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    You brought yourself back to life, Dad.
    You were somehow reborn back into your old self.
    I see you...
    You once again are guiding me through the day,
    praising me for things I think I fail at.
    Your sense of humor has returned,
    smiling and laughing like you used to.
    For months I was trapped inside my dark room,
    feeling no walls and seeing no light that you once provided me.
    One day you reached out to me,
    taking my hand while my eyes were still to adjust to the blackness of the room.
    It startled me at first,
    and you squeezed me tight,
    guiding me back into your light.
    I'm safe when I am with you,
    comfertable when I see you.
    My Father is back once again,
    tucking me in at night and walking with me when I feel enclosed in the darkness the world sheds.
    I kept you safe while that stroke devoured you,
    I took your hand and held you.
    I learned how much I love you...
    I felt how much I love you...
    And nothing is better than now,
    your recovery has beaten overall.
    I love you, Daddy,
    and for as long as I live,
    I will protect you as you protect me.




    Submitted on 2006-05-07 02:24:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yay reading this after the other piece (sorry I forget what it is called) is really sweet. That like even though there were hard times you stuck by him and it worked out in the end. I am glad everything is ok with you guys now. And that you both can love each other like before. And be "daddys little girl" like wisdom seeker said. haha. I would love to be daddys little girl as well but my dad is always busy at work and I am lucky if I even see him once a day. He often leaves before I wake up and comes home either before or after me, and then disappears. So yeah I would value any time I had with my father...and I am sad that I cant :(

    -Randee
    | Posted on 2007-04-04 00:00:00 | by UnderlinedInRed | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I am a father of some loving daughters and they are Daddy's girls too. This is so awesome in the fact that you as a teen of today can express your honest and deep love for your father. I am almost at the point of tears here because this has made me think of my own daughters. Your father is very lucky to have this in this day and age.
    Always let him know because we as fathers will give everything and ask for nothing.
    My daughters write here on ES as well and we have gained a new found rescpect for each other through the writing of poetry.
    I ask you to take a look at some of my older writes that I wrote to my daughters.

    I am a sucker for family writes and I am going to add this to my wall of fav's.

    Very, very well done

    Respect and Admiration

    Clyde
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]


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