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    dots Submission Name: On My Way Home(D-LAW)dots
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    Author: PROlifik
    ASL Info:    23/m/va
    Elite Ratio:    2.01 - 23/28/21
    Words: 788
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 1141
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       justa bout life and shit im goin threw
    just put it on paper...feel me

    another one by D-LAW


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    dotsOn My Way Home(D-LAW)dots
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    (intro-D-LAW)
    im wit yall,we all goin threw the same shit ya kno
    sometimes life aint right,so you gotta feel me tho
    girls,life,drama,seems like someone always out to hurt ya
    ............feel me



    "Somebody oughta just, reach out and, help me..."

    (D-LAW)
    while these events go on preceeding often times too misleading
    im standing to close to witness the innocent bleeding
    premature breeding i cant beleive what im seeing,some barley breathing
    church going but fall to the devil with the events that take place in the evening
    they aint out here to help you there eyes are too deciving,too many people leaving its demeaning
    at night im grieving while you dreaming witness some struggleing with reading we missing to many parents at PTA meetings,we witnessed for too long these lives taking a beating -theres a lesson in these rhymes im teachin-a movement im leading,so just reamin silent as the pastors preechin -dont inturupt when im speakin-you know who im speakin for-im on a level way past what you reachin for

    (hook-D-LAW)
    close ya eyes an just feel what i speak,let these words begin to heal the weak
    so fuck singing with me,get my back and just start swinging with me
    they dont know it but we winning,got there backs to the wall in the bottom of the 9th inning
    and thats just the begining,we defeating all the misleading givin light to every human being

    (hook-2(intro to next verse)-D-LAW)
    so how can you tell?a friend from an enemy?
    real or just pretend to be?when things clearly arent what they intend to be
    is this the end of me?regardless your gonna hear my voice till they send for me
    just speakin on whats meant to be-eventualy- somewhere down the road you'll mention me
    ya know im gonna get the last laugh i've moved on but i still aint past that...

    so whats the limit you willing to go to impress the rest?
    its not all about the way you dress it doesnt make sense to envolve yourslef in what causes you stress
    tryin to keep ya nose in everyones affiars seems like bad news always comes in pairs
    you keep tellin me life aint fair,but look around not even ya "bestfriend" cares
    im to rare you cant try to compare i still have the ability to remain aware of trouble "i feel in the air"
    one step ahead.. but overlooked due to this label i was forced to wear -the pain?of course its there
    the remorse wasnt there it wasnt fair i was forced to care when im not even supposed to care
    you dont seem like your ina rush to care so i'll just get outta your hair now we both can stare at an empty chair theres gotta be a lesson there
    seems like you come-back when theres trouble above ya so i still try to remember that number
    been months and ya misguided games still cause me a lack of slumber,still on my mind like i cant forget that summer?now i got new topics to to cover due to some overwhelming facts i've discovered
    all ya false statements need to be un-covered i know sometimes it seems like your the only one in trouble,
    but im so fuckin tired of reality thats why i wrote this- you cant promote bullshit but im at the end of my own wits,im about 2 slits away from having no wrists,things need to change quick,we all need something positive to grow with and while you know this why do you continue to condone this it makes NO sense now your problems are so dense please holla at me when you get your first offense
    lookin at images blurry behind a chained fence,face it -your thoughts are just to condensed to even put up a true defense
    i aint by any means bitchin but listin theres many others in ya same position
    more then enough suffereing from the same condition so quit YOUR bitchin
    i guess you could call this pay-back from how ya did me way-back
    but to be real yo i aint on your level im older i aint gotta say that- for now i'll just delay that
    but i'll give it to you-you know how to create a bad day,things would be mad different if i had my way
    so i turned to the ink with the pen to the pad i'll gave you an image of whatever i think
    ya know im gonna bounce back,you can count that the kids got his sound back
    walk wit me--my life,the movie motion picture soundtrack

    (outro-D-LAW)
    yea...just some of my thoughts...on my way home...ya kno....keepin the ink real since 98




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    ||| Comments |||
      hey bubz, this is ma fave from you, it was tight and topic was strong, i can relate in so many ways, luvin it,

    keep em cummin
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      Real [censored] in this verse. "tryin to keep ya nose in everyones affiars seems like bad news always comes in pairs
    you keep tellin me life aint fair,but look around not even ya "bestfriend" cares
    im to rare you cant try to compare i still have the ability to remain aware of trouble "i feel in the air""

    those were sick lines
    This one was deep and the topic was real.
    it was reall lyrical as well.

    PC
    | Posted on 2006-05-07 00:00:00 | by SinCeer05 | [ Reply to This ]


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