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    dots Submission Name: the soldierdots
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    Author: liedivine
    ASL Info:    21/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    5.35 - 6/6/4
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
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    Description:
       I wrote this with a theme in mind, one which has been floating around in all my writings--infidelity.


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    dotsthe soldierdots
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    The Soldier

    Wish I knew what
    what warm hip-flasked whiskey feels
    white cold as it infiltrates ready
    mouth tightens, paths narrow
    through first tension, eases, whispers
    heat ears, neck, toe-ball-toe of feet.

    Quiet. It must quiet, to prevent
    uneasy mumbles—thought’s messy
    messy action falls nearby blame,
    less, blushing missed falsehoods,
    lies unearthed leaching perfect laughs into
    basin of synapses.

    Is incentive in fear;
    is reaction in dread, looking through
    clouded, teary glass; is incentive, is reaction
    in marbled replies and interruptions,
    cupped in moist palms that sway
    most priests to offer dry escape,
    a lax prayer and taxed conscience—

    someone, dearest, lies in false hope, certain un-
    lying in hedgerows, already seen, waits.




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