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Falling Hard

Author: mrmundane
ASL Info:    20/m/vancouver bc
Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 47 /96 /78
Words: 124
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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Falling Hard

Do I mean anything
and since the world is dying
Will it be reborn with me inside it
or am I not worthwhile like everything else

Inside out I'm tearing
an invisible doctor leaves the building
Stuck inside, in chains
lonely when the world outside is fucked without me

And like an Apostle falling dead
the rivers edge murders
Lungs are filled by ruddy waves
the eyes turn coldly backwards

In the marsh lays the tiger
idle eyes of the devil's hunter
Dragging days he does not sway
he is a patient silent predator

Sometimes clouds will call my name
in the nights with wind and rain
I show her me without myself
she speaks in drops i feel her

Submitted on 2006-05-07 19:41:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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and i think thats what i like about it.
its not something you read all the time and thats the best can see that it does seem like you didnt really bother [i guess] but thats what makes the writing you..
um, over all this is really good. it would make a cool twizted song..
keep writing..
| Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
  First impressions is that it is really good. I like the way it flows. What inspired it?
| Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by sunraybutterfly | [ Reply to This ]
  That is gorgeous.
Your words never fail to amaze me.

You have a lot of talent.

What else can I say? I love it.

Very beautifully done
| Posted on 2006-06-11 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]

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