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    dots Submission Name: We Bleed Inkdots
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    Author: C. Starr
    ASL Info:    35/yesplz/State of denial
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 130/196/68
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1309
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 968



    Description:
       I got the inspiration for this from a member of this site and their profile name ...... I Bleed Ink. But also my roommate and all of us.....all of us who really do bleed ink on a daily basis.

    3-2006


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    dotsWe Bleed Inkdots
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    We bleed ink...

    We...

    Draw it out....

    On cryptic paper.

    We write it beneath.

    Beneath the lines of regular society.

    Beneath what you see.

    What you believe in.

    What you dream of.

    Deep in the night.

    We bleed ink around it.

    Like a shell holding an ancient creature.

    Around the possibilities of us.

    Of we.....flawed humans.

    We bleed ink underneath....

    Underneath the teachings of genius minds.

    Twisting in the wind like leaves in a future storm.

    You warn me.

    Warn me to not stray from my soul.

    We bleed ink.

    Around the sketch of this planet.

    Around the sketch of our own meager existence.

    We Bleed Ink.


    2006




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      mmmm (boy i seem to be mmmming alot lately) I like this alot. Its very interesting how you chose your words and you kinda reminded me of the writing I love to write. Its very vivid and passionate. I love the fact that it talks about so many things under one category and what I love even more was that you linked that to dreams and beliefs because in reality what makes us who we are is not what we do but how we do it.

    You bleed ink reminds me also of sacrifices that we make daily, some which not many notice, other which are pretty obvious. Its very funny how you talk about the pathetic existance many call living and life but what moved me most from all of your writing was the imagery that you used which I love alot.

    when you said

    "Underneath the teachings of genius minds.

    Twisting in the wind like leaves in a future storm."

    I could actually visualize a genius mind a stormy day in autumm


    tanks for the great read and I hope i can see more of it in the future

    andrea
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]


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