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    dots Submission Name: Is she out theredots
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    Author: freebd
    ASL Info:    32/m/
    Elite Ratio:    2.22 - 3/9/6
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsIs she out theredots
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    A thousand nights

    With beautiful women

    As most want to play & lie

    More fear comes

    From liking her

    I watch my needs run by

    Yet sit down by my side

    Put trust in my hands for eternity

    Long after the black rain

    Our blue rose will still shine




    Submitted on 2006-05-07 21:56:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2006-05-17 00:00:00 | by nobodys_angel | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh......I like this one! ALOT!

    I felt that you wanted a serious relationship, and not "One night stands"

    I liked how you made it short, and still got yoru point across. You discribe very well also.

    I like your style, and im sure if you conitinue to write poems like this...you will find "Her"

    She is somewhere...trust me, I know how you feel...and i loved how you put that through in your poem!

    well, tahnks for the poem

    Much Joy,
    *Epie*
    | Posted on 2006-05-07 00:00:00 | by CherStreisand0 | [ Reply to This ]


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