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    dots Submission Name: No explanationdots

    Author: TremendoCulo16
    ASL Info:    19/f/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 20/27/22
    Words: 226
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsNo explanationdots

    This taste of beer is what i fear most
    It has no sugar so it is not sweet

    Its an icebreaker and after a few
    I feel like someone that isnt me someone new

    This beer ive grown to love
    Everyone screaming at me Chug! Chug! Chug!

    I hate this beer it goes down so badly
    I can feel it in my throat

    Why do i do this to myself
    I hear the sound of my own voice

    This taste will never grow on me
    But i see the disappointment on their faces

    I drink, you drink
    I go down, you go down with me

    I only drink more and soon my inhabitions are out the window
    I slowly forget my purpose in this world

    The beer runs through me faster than my decision to throw my morals away
    I go to pee and as i look in the bathroom mirror i cant recognize myself

    Whats become of me?
    Was i always like this

    I do this every week and its always the same thing
    Love can take over your life, but a lack of it can drive you mad

    I can barely walk
    I can hardly stand

    Stand to look at this face
    The one ive known for 19 years

    Submitted on 2006-05-07 23:53:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You got the point across, but the whole thing was mixed and hard to read. Some lines rhyme, some are long enough to be two different sentences. On the whole, it was great, just needs a tad of work I think.
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]

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