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    dots Submission Name: Save Me From Medots
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    Author: Poetic_tragedy6
    ASL Info:    25/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    2.65 - 114/153/74
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 744
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 701



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       Just a lil poem. Comments would be nice....


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    dotsSave Me From Medots
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    Wake me up,
    I sleep too long.
    Force me to smile,
    Right my wrongs.

    Open me up,
    Touch my soul.
    Stitch me up,
    Make me whole.

    Help my heart,
    And make me heal.
    Free my spirit,
    Make me feel.

    Dry my eyes,
    Wipe my tears.
    Make me forget,
    The past two years.

    Hold my hand,
    And hold it tight.
    Caress my soul,
    Make me right.

    Stop me from crying,
    Every night in my bed.
    Help me forget,
    The things they said.

    I am begging you,
    Hear my plea.
    Help me out,
    Save me from me.




    Submitted on 2006-05-08 00:16:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      "Open me up,
    Touch my soul.
    Stitch me up,
    Make me whole."

    I really liked this stanza i mean the entire piece was good but this stanza just really grabbed at me.

    "I am begging you,
    Hear my plea.
    Help me out,
    Save me from me."

    I liked this stanza also especially how you tied in your title at the end. Sometimes the person hardest on us is ourselves, we torture ourselves not seeing all the good within us. This piece really hit on that, great write.

    Peace,
    Jay.
    | Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      I like your poem-its that spell you've just casted-I can see a person roll up in there bed sad and all alone
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by ms.v | [ Reply to This ]
      That is fan-f*cking-tastic.
    Really, I love it.

    Normally I would point out my favorite part, but I love the whole thing too much to pick one.

    I don't even really know what to say. I'm hardly ever speechless, but I think I am now.

    Consider me a fan.

    Very beautifully done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-07-09 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]


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