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    Author: Darkstar9500
    ASL Info:    18/male/Missouri
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 39/56/19
    Words: 222
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I can't stop thinking about her!!!! ARRRGGHHH!!! She won't leave me alone!!! In my mind and my eyes she haunts me!! She seems to get over it just fine!! Why am I the only one left in this land of torture?! Why can't I get over her?! Do I even want to?! I gained and lost soo much on that day!!! Now what?! My future holds nothing for me no matter how many times people tell me I'll find the one for me!! It won't change reality!! You can try to hide it, but it always comes back to haunt!! Jenn if you're reading this I love you. That will never change. I feel soo lost because I was soo sure of everything with you in my arms. Now I'm not sure what to think. Does it ever stop hurting !?!?!?!? ARRRGGGHHH!!!!


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    Just another day.
    Just a simple invitation.
    I hold you in my arms
    For the last time.

    Your body pressed against mine
    Like a egyptian goddess you
    go to wash away the past.
    That soul...

    I join you.
    this is the beginning.
    But this is the end.
    That body...

    A parting gift.
    One last lingering memory
    That the fight was not in vain.
    That skin...

    Laying together.
    One more tear to wipe away.
    The Guardian wraps his wings around her.
    That face...

    Flight into a new world.
    Tracing every inch of you.
    Holding your angelic hands
    Those hands...

    Rejoining the world below.
    Putting the masks back on.
    Our eyes connect through the masks.
    That smile...

    The sweet angel destorys the sweet world.
    She must leave my side for her true love.
    The tears of love and beauty I wipe away.
    Those eyes...

    Taking my hands begging forgivness.
    Hiding my sorrow behind my wings.
    One last kiss of love.
    Those lips...

    The world has been forgotten.
    Struggling to get back to that world.
    The door is shut,
    waiting for the one made of fiction to open.

    Every part of her haunts me.
    In my dreams and in my waking eyes.
    These wounds won't seem to heal.
    So weak from the wounds of love.




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      Theyre both right.. it never stops hurting, for either of us...good poem... i loved
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by CutMeDeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Rick this is relly strong strong strong piece. I am so sorry you are going through this. I am sorry that people have to be so cruel unintentionally. Now what I am going to tell you might not be any good especially it being about this situation but the truth has to be said.....it never stops hurting.....until you find someone to fill the void. But yet even then it still hurts. I am sorry Rick. If you need me to talk to I am here ok? Otherwise great write. take care....

    -Christina
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by POETRY | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey Rick, Christina's right, it never stops hurting. You can't just make as if certain feelings don't exist. really hope you'll be ok. This was really beautifully expressed.
    God Bless
    *Dani
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by firefoxvixen | [ Reply to This ]


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