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    dots Submission Name: Leave me Behinddots
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    Author: Kay
    ASL Info:    15/f/
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 216/197/68
    Words: 313
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 885
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 2080



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    dotsLeave me Behinddots
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    she's got the body of a homecoming queen
    and she's got the smile of a dream
    she's got everything
    and everything is all you need
    so leave me behind

    i don't smile like her
    and i don't love like her
    i'm nothing compared like her
    so why did you want to get to know me
    i'm no one special, i'm no one
    so leave me behind

    the stars didn't shine up to night
    and my wish dispeared into the light
    the clouds covered up my mind
    and my dreams were calling me to shut my eyes
    but than again your the only one i haven't dreamed dead
    so what does this crap mean?
    please...
    please.. just leave me behind

    my blood leaves a trial
    with me disapearing into the distance
    its all hell
    and i'm lost
    and all this is...................(hell)
    leave me...
    leave me BEHIND


    *******chorus*******
    I'M NO ONE (no one) SPECIAL
    I'M NO ONE
    singing sorry [x2]
    singing tears. love
    singing sorry for i can't be the one you want


    i'm all lost


    the sweat on my tears
    running down my cheecks
    each one trying not to disapear
    then again when the do.. the reapear
    back into my fears
    making me want my feelings to disapear



    i won't love like her
    but i wont hate like her
    i won't be like her
    but i won't hate like her
    shes got the style
    shes got the smile
    she's got it all wild
    she's got everything, and everying is all you need
    so leave me behind




    ***reapeat chours***






    so sorry that i can't be the one you want
    sorry (SORRY) [x2]







    Submitted on 2006-05-08 01:11:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      A few grammatical errors, disappeared, tonight, cheeks, trail, disappear, appear. You get the picture, other than the grammar, it was excellent. The only reason why I say that is because you can lose someone quite fast if you spell one word wrong. So I'm not trying to be a [censored], but that's the way it is. If this really is about a guy you have had experience with, don't worry about him. If you read my journal you'd see that I went through the same thing. I just posted it on here for humor. Keep up the work.
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    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by missing_angel | [ Reply to This ]


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