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    dots Submission Name: Diluteddots
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    Author: Infected Mind
    ASL Info:    19
    Elite Ratio:    1.57 - 14/18/25
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 818
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 456



    Description:
       i kinda see "the lake" as who we are or would be before we go though the trials of our lives(pure). the "sea" is society and the "changing" represents how actions that hurt us, harden our hearts leading to becoming more like the the things that have made us this way... i may make it longer because i was on a schedule that kind of rushed it(i was in class)


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    i am the lake,
    that drains to the sea,
    perpetuating,
    the emptying of me,

    what was, is no more,
    and can never be again,
    no cures, no reparations,
    as my tradjedy lies within,

    i was the solitary, i was the pure,
    kidnapped
    feeling a loss as i am changing,
    this transformation will not halt,
    particles are now rearranging,
    as i am cast out in the salt.




    Submitted on 2006-05-08 08:22:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i agree with scissorhands over there, i like small pretty poems rather than huge ugly ones. nothin wrong with a small poem if it gets the job done, and this definitely got the job done.
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by shmurr | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah, you definately have to go back and finish this one out. i'm really anxious to see what else you can do with it. as of now, it's beautiful. later it will be, well, MORE than beautiful.
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by LostAlias | [ Reply to This ]
      that is simple, yet profound! you said a wealth of deep things without using a lot of words! sometimes...less is more!
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]


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