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    dots Submission Name: Wake updots

    Author: Silver20G
    ASL Info:    28/M/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 158/109/25
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       I wrote this along time ago for a friend of my in a situation that was back and forth. The would break up and make up and it caused more and more pain each time. If one had not pulled away I don't figure either on would be here today. Do you thing.

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    dotsWake updots

    Pain is something we at one time must
    Quite often we misunderstandthe reason or we don't get what was meant.
    We open our hearts again foolishly trying to mend or save what's left in a relationship so in distress, and when the past and present mesh you feel nothing but regrets.
    Now who steps in? Who saves us from us?
    Or are we stuck repeating the same mistakes until our times up.
    Don't fall into that cycle of lust and no love. Don't be the one to always put your pride above, the purity of a touch.
    Love and ego will fight tooth and nail.
    You must not let your true feeling be jailed.
    For I don't know of any pain worse than betrayal.

    Submitted on 2006-05-08 12:44:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is so true. It shows insight, the part I find ironic is that deep down most of us no this, we just choose to ignore it :/
    Good job hun :)
    | Posted on 2009-04-21 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm speechless , it's very well written. i have serve in the U.S. Navy. great work , checkout my poems and share with the armed forces men and women.
    | Posted on 2009-03-28 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed reading this. It held a great amount of depth and meaning to you. Personally, I could not relate, but I'm sure someone could.
    Overall, I enjoyed it very much and I dont really have any writing suggestions for you. Good job and continue to write.
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
      This my Friend is very well worded
    In the short amount of words you used you were able to capture an incredible amount of emotion
    The last line is the most powerful part of this poem to me as it speaks pure truth
    Excellent Write!!!
    God Bless

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
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    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

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