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    dots Submission Name: I Believedots
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    Author: submarine
    Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 128/91/45
    Words: 61
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    dotsI Believedots
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    There's so much to tell you,
    But I keep quiet.
    They all say I'm stupid,
    That I'll lose you anyway,
    But I have faith.
    Because I believe in god
    and I believe in you.
    I believe there is a time,
    For you to see my love,
    I know my feelings wont change,
    And until that day....
    I'll still have faith.




    Submitted on 2006-05-08 12:49:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is not bad.. short and to the point.. One thing that kind of bugs me is how you spelled anyway like neway.. and didn't capitalize all the I's like i'm.. Those things are not critical but for me it is distracting. Don't wait to long with out doing anything .. it will only make you crazy.
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by Cassius | [ Reply to This ]


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