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    dots Submission Name: Never Doubt Lovedots
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    Author: Hip-Hop Honey
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105/86/31
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 991
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 760



    Description:
       This is a poem I wrote for Mylo awhile ago and I will be submiting more eventually but for now just enjoy Peace Out!


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    dotsNever Doubt Lovedots
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    In the back of my mind
    There is a sence of doubt
    About how my life will turn out
    Where will I be
    What will I do
    Who will I love
    I know it's going to be you
    But what happens when
    A girls dream doesn't come true
    When she knows these feelings and actions
    Just won't do
    But becauseof the love
    That bonds us two is true
    Then all that matters in the end is you
    And how one day we will be and live
    Happily and free
    In a world that was filled with doubt
    When we are together we will show them what loves about
    And how we turned a friendship inside out
    And sitting around in doubt
    Is not a way to work things out




    Submitted on 2006-05-08 13:01:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Cool poem, I like the way you arrange your words in this poem. The flow was good too.
    As you know there is always a (but).
    maybe think about removing the second last line. I think you could do without it. But thats just me take care.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great writing dear. The end seemed to get tangled and out of place, but it was still enjoyable. Whether the words tangled or not it was clear and touching. Keep up the great work.
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      NICE! I like how it flowed so well good job I am surprised no one posted anything about it keep it up peace & stay safe...
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]


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