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Never Doubt Love

Author: Hip-Hop Honey
ASL Info:    16/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 105 /86 /31
Words: 131
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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This is a poem I wrote for Mylo awhile ago and I will be submiting more eventually but for now just enjoy Peace Out!

Never Doubt Love

In the back of my mind
There is a sence of doubt
About how my life will turn out
Where will I be
What will I do
Who will I love
I know it's going to be you
But what happens when
A girls dream doesn't come true
When she knows these feelings and actions
Just won't do
But becauseof the love
That bonds us two is true
Then all that matters in the end is you
And how one day we will be and live
Happily and free
In a world that was filled with doubt
When we are together we will show them what loves about
And how we turned a friendship inside out
And sitting around in doubt
Is not a way to work things out

Submitted on 2006-05-08 13:01:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Cool poem, I like the way you arrange your words in this poem. The flow was good too.
As you know there is always a (but).
maybe think about removing the second last line. I think you could do without it. But thats just me take care.

The Poor Man's Poet.
| Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a great writing dear. The end seemed to get tangled and out of place, but it was still enjoyable. Whether the words tangled or not it was clear and touching. Keep up the great work.
| Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
  NICE! I like how it flowed so well good job I am surprised no one posted anything about it keep it up peace & stay safe...
| Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]

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