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    dots Submission Name: Love Storydots
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    Author: curiosityskitty
    ASL Info:    30/F/TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 145/149/30
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 190
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    Bytes: 943



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    dotsLove Storydots
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    Once upon a time a girl fell in love
    And it filled her with darkened soul with light
    For she was complete

    And She kissed the sky and blessed the sun
    For her heart was happy and she was loved
    And her heart sang

    But one day the light ceased to shine
    And the darkness again took her soul
    And she cried

    And her pain rushed forth like a river
    And her heart wept and her soul was silenced
    For she mourned her lost love

    And the sky opened and bathed the girl in it's sorrow
    And the sorrow fell like rain and devoured her
    For she was broken

    And the sun she once adored mocked her
    And denied her it's warmth
    For she was alone

    And hope eludes her for despair is her only companion
    And on crimson tides she sets her sorrow free
    And she is at peace




    Submitted on 2006-05-08 15:32:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really liked this one. In my opinion, this write would sound alot better without the use of the word "And" as much. With And at the beginning of almost every line it makes it like you are reading one long sentence to me. Otherwise this is wonderful dear. Keep up the great work
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this, you have all the steps of love and broken hearts.

    its sad tho cause alot of girls go through that and it just makes your poem so much better knowing its true.

    well hope to see some more of your work
    <3ash
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]



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