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    dots Submission Name: Remembering Andrew Marchanddots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 913
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    Description:
       My friend died last weekend, he was in a friends garage with his girlfriend and it caught on fire, Andrew died saving Julia by lifting her up and pushing out the window. He unfortunately couldn't make it out. If it wasn't for Julia his body wouldn't be identified. Andrew wasn't the greatest kid, he got in alot of trouble, but he was always there for a friend, and he died as a hero


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    Remembering Andrew Marchand
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    Once just a normal teen, now lies in the ground as a hero. Died for his love, Julia. An uncontrolable fire broke out, while they both laid to rest. Waking up with air being robbed, heat, a firery end. You sacrificed your life something you could never get back, a true gamble. You lost but Julia lived, you testified your love for her. Andrew, you now lay in the ground as a hero but never will be forgoten.

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    Andrew forever will I miss you.
    No one Expect this. You were untouchable, nothing hurt you, you won you fights and now you're dead










    Submitted on 2006-05-08 17:00:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow i am so sorry for you loss. i know hearing those words don't help. but from the sounds of it this andrew was a good guy to save his girl not every guy does that. joanna
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]


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