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thing about a thing that's somethin

Author: mrmundane
ASL Info:    20/m/vancouver bc
Elite Ratio:    2.4 - 47 /96 /78
Words: 148
Class/Type: Poetry /Venting
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hmm... okay, it's kind of about dealing with loss a little bit, at the same time, it's about not dealing with it and just moving on for the sake of moving on even though the future looks bleak but just accepting it. which i tried to put into an image in the last line, which is a metaphor for how futile it might be to protect yourself from whatever might come, like say if there's a bomb falling from the sky and you rub tanning lotion into your turban, it's not going to any good... but it would be funny, so might as well.

thing about a thing that's somethin

a vacuum inside told me who should be what for
in the mirror on the couch
which replaces the face which resided there before
and all reverence is dismissed into an evening ashtray
which foolishly, i knock to the floor.

i wish mud surrounded me
yeah and i was mud in the mud
cuz mud is everything
and everything is mud

there might be a saying that one might say
that the day is today and tommorrow is a day too late
when the streets of baghdad are blanketted in fur
or was it leather

then oval shadows would grow a bit bigger
maybe as big as my head
and then the hot oven would give me a burning sensation on my skin
pass the tanning lotion, thanks man,
i think i'll rub it into the big black turban wrapped around my head.

Submitted on 2006-05-08 18:44:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  ok to be honest, you lost me at the beggining but for some reason i just kept reading
its interesting in the odd kinda way but i like it
hope to read some of your other work
| Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]

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