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    dots Submission Name: Loud Silencedots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsLoud Silencedots
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    I hear the silence,
    In my head,
    I feel the wrath of violence,
    So I must be dead.

    I want peace of mind,
    But I can't find it at home,
    So I turn to my humble rhymes,
    Just so I won't feel alone.

    I hear the silence,
    And I can't make an advance,
    I hear the sirens,
    So I know I have no chance.

    Lord,
    Bring me a moment of peace,
    I can't stand the loud ringing of silence,
    Please help my pain ease.

    I can no longer,
    Take this noise,
    There's inevitable hunger,
    And so this loud silence,
    Is now part of my life;
    And no longer my choice!





    Submitted on 2004-05-10 09:10:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      your poem..gives message..., like storm. it all quiet..and within silence..awaits the coming. just my thoughts about your poem.. it sounds serious
    | Posted on 2004-05-10 00:00:00 | by Vibrant | [ Reply to This ]
      it's great, I think something should change at the end... not just leave it off with that plea, give the readers some kind of assurance that either: you got your peace, or 2: you didn't. ~CW
    | Posted on 2004-05-10 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]


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