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    dots Submission Name: Cindy Leedots
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    Author: orderly conduct
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 51/80/36
    Words: 67
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       i think this is the first rhyming poem ive written.


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    dotsCindy Leedots
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    Under the bridge
    where the daffodils grew
    And our saliva sunk into the ocean below
    With our rolled up pants
    And buttoned down sleeves
    We grew sugar plants and ate sugar leaves
    The smell of your misery rolled over your palms
    Dripping with sweat as you rubbed at your eyes
    And your shame shined through when we all realized
    You went insane before your mother died.




    Submitted on 2006-05-08 22:59:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      starving children's got your back.
    oh fu.ckazz. it doesn't REALLY rhyme.
    Neutral Milk Hotel much?
    this is the nicest thing to happen since i happen to overeat.
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by denial | [ Reply to This ]
      Ello.sista.

    Oh my. THis is ur 1st rhyme poem and u were awesome at it!!

    It's pretty short but there's a lot of character in it. I LOVED IT.
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by D-Ink | [ Reply to This ]
      I Like the discriptive words you used along with the feeling you were getting across. good job keep it up.
    | Posted on 2006-05-08 00:00:00 | by KrisBenjamin | [ Reply to This ]
      Those would be some really cool song lyrics. Sorry if that offends you, but while I read it I heard some music in my head.
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by iamwhoiam | [ Reply to This ]


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