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    dots Submission Name: Love Thoughtsdots
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    Author: wewak11
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 3436/3630/329
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dots Love Thoughtsdots
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    ...do seahorses kiss?
    Galloping over a reefy wonderland
    and hiding under a coral sky
    as their tails entwine?
    Iíll bet you a starfish they do,

    ... if turtles really mate for life,
    do they ever quarrel?
    Would either of them recognize
    the one of the hundreds of eggs
    that survives against all odds?
    Iíll bet you a teardrop they would.

    ...why do whales swim in schools?
    They aren't afraid of the dark, so
    are they scared of the pointed harpoon of
    being alone in a big blue ocean?
    Iíll bet you a love song they are.





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      This is a great piece that definately gives cause to stop and think about our own relationships. It's about our surroundings and how we keep our company. There are things that we do or say or belive that will help us make the most of the moment. That will allow us to realize fortune in the midst of tragedy. That will help us to face our true fears while enjoying the companionship of others.

    Your writing on this is very good. I'm looking forward to taking a look at more of your writing. Keep up the good work, and may the pen be with you (or the keyboard if you prefer)!
    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by thepowerglider | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww this was quaint and kinda sweet. I really enjoyed it. I liked how you bet with something tangible and relevant at the ned of each line it was clever use of words. I was touched by a clip of sadness in the last verse. The first two kept my eyes open to the wonder of life and the sentimentally of my own heart.

    Bless you
    xxx
    Kate
    | Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice. Very nice.

    I think sometimes we forget we are simple human animals. I think we forget our connections to the other beings on this planet. So, whenever there is a piece that helps us remember that animals can love, and we can learn from them, I'm tickled pink.

    I love the picture!

    Write something I can pick apart sometime, ok?

    Take Care!

    Chell
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by Chell | [ Reply to This ]
      This was unique...and your title inspired me to write my poem that night...for I had many love thoughts burning in my heart at that moment...

    I used to have some seahorses in my fish tank for awhile, by the way...they were always so gentle and mesmerizing as they floated softly around in their own little world...I never did catch them making love at all...and eventually they died due to a misfortunate bleaching incident (don't ask) during a tank-cleaning... but anyway, I'm rambling endlessly so I'll shut up...

    Take care,

    ~B~
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by Emerging Soul | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the title of this write and indeed I like the write itself. It was short and sweet. I like how you used animals in this rather than humans gave it s little creativity and uniqueness.

    Keep up the good work and have a blessed and most wonderful day and God bless. Thanks so much for sharing. This was indeed a delightful read.
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ]
      wow..that was sweet and touching...and beautiful...i esecially love the part about the whales...i feel animals are usually in herds or school not for survival but for the companionship of knowing that others are there with you....another good one
    <3 krin
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by Krinchinian | [ Reply to This ]
      This was so cute. You showed how true love endures with animals, giving hope for the human race to take notes. This was just so upbeat and positive. I just want to go to the beach now. Great work.

    Catrina
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this, you little gifted thing! I think you did such a great job, there is not much else to say, I have always loved your work, and that is the truth.

    Until next read

    Denise
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really sweet and touching. I've noticed you've taken more of a serious tone lately with your work and it's refreshing (not that your humorous stuff is bad, it's just nice to stretch yourself once in a while).

    Peace,

    Joe
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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