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    dots Submission Name: Conquering All Pathsdots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This was written a few weeks ago. I was feeling lost in my ways. Things are looking up for me now. I hope its good enough to be even a little enjoyable.


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    Constantly worried I will make a mistake,
    Always wondering what can be changed.
    How did I end up stuck again?
    Why has my life become so deranged?

    I can't recall which turn was the wrong,
    So many mistakes made in past years.
    Hiding my fear and doubts all along,
    Trying my best to hold back the tears.

    Left with my thoughts and none to sooth,
    Deciding to start all over.
    Pick up the pieces and move on with my life,
    On my way, what will I discover?

    A new world awaits me outside my fears,
    A window left open not many steps away.
    All thats left now is to get there,
    But how do I know I will not stray?

    Of all the paths I choose to take,
    They all seemed the hardest to follow,
    But now I know they are all just as hard,
    I have to conquer them all to beat my sorrows.




    Submitted on 2006-05-09 08:32:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Seems like you said what you were feeling straight out. leaving no room for interpretation. While that is alright sometimes, other times you really want to insert some symbolism and mystery. Glad your days are looking up now.
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]
      very literal....conceptually empty but pognant at the same time.On one hand very little in ways of imagery is there leaving not much for the reader to interpret, however, the central message is well conveyed and delivered in a way that is easily understood.....hope you are feeling better now. These types of writtings ring more true to me of a journal entry or sort of a daily log, do you know what I mean?
    | Posted on 2006-05-09 00:00:00 | by goveiac | [ Reply to This ]


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