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    dots Submission Name: SINcerity (finshed version)dots
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    Author: SinCeer05
    ASL Info:    21mVA
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 243/279/168
    Words: 641
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 996
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    dotsSINcerity (finshed version)dots
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    Show me your insides and I will do the same
    Spill your thoughts to the side, but donít tell my your name
    I will recognize your face, and remember your honesty
    For each second I ask why we taste, everything but SINcerity
    Folded eyes are quiet in the dark
    Like the lies untold to my silent heart
    Your sound used to be that of a angels
    harp
    Its violent now the way you tear me apart
    with a tongue so sharp
    I succumb to a gun to get back to the start

    Times before the end
    when within each rhyme I had no sin
    Spoke of images of the sky and our loves entirety
    It was all that I needed to get me high and see you with clarity
    Like the moments of our past
    weíve grown up without significance
    So I ask you to own up at last
    With condolence for the indifference
    In your prison of control
    where I was the convict
    always to listen and swallow my soul
    without being honest
    scared of the arrest, and the daily test
    that comes with each spoken breathe
    from your legislative tones
    I used to be open while smoking on the phone
    with you on the other end all alone
    waiting for a friend to come into your home
    and not pretend or condone his love for you again and again like a metronome
    like lives below who miss so many of their friends
    with wishes to be alive and be able to hug each other before the end
    I stood like a rug and you made it a trend
    Once a thug now in love this is the last time I pretend
    to know what SIN-cerity shows
    on the inside underneath our clothes we grin like a parody we glow
    but were on the brim of transparency no sin will dim the clarity
    of running from the truth so grim its our clairvoyanc-y
    from nature we avoid-to-care
    committed to this annoyance-y no poise is fair to bid or get rid of the buoyancy
    of a load to carry
    like feeling the modes of out-of-control its scary
    enraged with stealing what seemed like codes I suppose were two lost souls care-free
    taking off each others clothes wanting to see
    let me see
    come get me for me to perceive your personal integrity
    like when we met without the felonies
    no regret or threats were made while I was selling these
    split personalities
    Like an artist without a palette
    you claim irrationality with so much pain I donít know what to call-it
    Farthest from true-love Iím just being honest for the few who do trust
    in words not in lust like being sought with disgust
    over deception that rusts itís our spot of conception where I bust
    I must look in between the collection of dust-to-see that itís free-to-trust
    the detection of perfection leaves-us free-to-brush
    the layers of retention that we retain from being mentioned
    love is insane
    They forgot to mention
    repetitive for attention
    We canít get above loves sedative or lesson
    were dead if we donít give all into our confession unsparingly
    Of feeling blessed for this ascension into Sincerity


    Show me your insides and I will do the same
    Spill your thoughts to the side, but donít tell my your name
    I will recognize your face, and remember your honesty
    For each second I ask why we taste, everything but SINcerity
    Folded eyes are quiet in the dark
    Like the lies untold to my silent heart
    Your sound used to be that of a angels
    harp
    Its violent now the way you tear me apart
    with a tongue so sharp
    I succumb to a gun to get back to the start




    Submitted on 2006-05-09 18:36:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, this was kool, i agree with ky that this sounded real personal, but that is what makes your work well work,
    i liked it, its gonna be added to my faves,

    keep me posted

    shae
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by shae_indauk | [ Reply to This ]
      hey bubz, i loved this, it seemed realy personal, a sort of cry out for true love, i can totaly relate, its gonna be added to ma faves,
    keep em cummin
    kyrenia
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      deep emotions shrouded deep in the cover of a super intellegent flow. i like it. man it's definitely going on my fave list. kinda sad. but it's not meant to have a happy ending, is it?
    | Posted on 2006-06-04 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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