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Author: Clayton
ASL Info:    55/Country Boy/Somewhere
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Class/Type: Story /Comedy
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As I was about to go under the knife, the Nurse waved a needle over my face and said,
"Here is my MAGIC WAND, Goodnight!
Needless to say, I had a very wierd dream all the while the Doctors poked, pried and cut corners looking for an easy way out of the mess they had created.
I do not suppose you ever dreamed during surgery, I did!


A magic wand, what silly thoughts filled my head,
She has no power over me, as from her book she read.
Shanty-shanty-shack-be-back, To trees you'll be, return now back!
And there I was sitting in a deep dark forest, in total black.

It's just a dream, as steam rose from a bubbling pot,
I'm making you a cure, but the water must be hot.
A nightmare has overcome me, backing away from the fire,
No black hat or dress? What became of the witches attire?

Her grin began to grow, In her hand she held a drink,
So pleasing to my eye, it warmed me some, I think?
She read another line, Follow-follow-walk-with-me, Your heart belongs to me!
Eariler, I knew she was so ugly, with her now I wish to be.

The sounds of music, they died away,
As lights blasted from above,
How are you doing? Feeling better today?
Do you need a warm blanket, my love?
Wake up honey, your in the recovery room!
Don't pull on that, its your breathing tube,
Don't try to sit up, you have wires everywhere.


Submitted on 2006-05-09 21:09:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  HA! Damn! What an interesting dream. But ya know, I am thinking that this was much more than a dream for you? It seems to be much more of a reality of a personal experience. And all told with your adorable light hearted sense of humor too hee hee! Fortunately for me, I have only had one surgery so far in my life and it was minor outpt knee surgery which seems trival compared to breathing tubes and such as you have mentioned here. But of course, being a nurse, I have seen my share of this type of thing and your sense of humor about it is priceless. I do hope this was merely a dream for you but if it was in fact a reality, I hope you are well. Thanks for sharing this. Take care.

| Posted on 2006-05-13 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  HA, HA, HA , HA

This so funny. Wish I had that kind of medicine when I went under the knife.

This sort of reminds me of a couple of fairy tales I read earlier in my youth (Way Earlier).

Looks like she was brewing some love potion just for you.

I had an experience years ago but i wasn't asleep.
The nurse gave me something that relaxed me really well and I really liked it alot.
I asked her if it came in six packs and that if it did then I will have a six pack to go.

Love the visual here. Still laughing at this one.

The last lines were great. More morphine


Nicely done

Respect and Admiration

| Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
  This was great! So, they put you under and you fell in love with a witch eh? That is something to definitely continue sleeping on. Not telling what kind of adventure that may have turned into.

So this is a true story? Amazing of some of the things that are mind is able to construe.

This was wonderfully written. The way that it had that mystical rhythm. That of which a woman of such nature would put in tongue. Kind of fairy tale like. I was brought into the world of the dream all through the rhythm. That by far was my favorite part of this. As for the words....they also were magical. You were able to engulf this whole setting, and not only write the words....but also paint the painting.

Such a pity you had to wake.....

Much love,

Li Li
| Posted on 2006-06-23 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]

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