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A Fantasy World

Author: manda_bear
ASL Info:    24;f; alabama
Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 57 /64 /23
Words: 158
Class/Type: Lyrics /Misc
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A Fantasy World

You took me by the hand and led me far away from the world that I thought to be real
I never knew that I was being held captive in a fantasy world that was destroying itself

Show me how it feels to be alive without it being a lie. Keep me by your side so I don't lose my sight again

I can't understan why I didn't know these people were shielding me from knowing what I should have known a long time ago
There has to be a reason for the lies they told me about my life I lived before you came and opened my eyes

Am I just a part of and imagination?
Or am I just another creation that wasn't suppose to exist in the real world?
These questions haunt my mind and keep me awake at night so thank you for

(Chorus repeat til end)

Submitted on 2006-05-10 04:11:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Nice lyrics. I would suggest you work on the flow and correct a couple of spelling errors. It was sweet. It was like you were asking to be saved from your current state of mind. Nice work.

| Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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