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    dots Submission Name: Why?dots

    Author: Infected Mind
    ASL Info:    19
    Elite Ratio:    1.57 - 14/18/25
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Broken
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       i had an abusive father...i still have unanswered questions...

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    If there is one question to ask i would only ask you why,
    why couldnt you do it,
    why couldnt you try,
    was it that I held so many demands,
    as i stared you with outstreched hands,
    where were you then when all i needed was love,
    just three simple words or even a hug,
    but as i grow old, i dont miss you as much,
    and as i grow cold, i dont long for your touch,
    caring is sadly, something you cannot do,
    i have been affected, i grow more like you
    why couldn't you just do it,
    now can you see?
    why couldn't you do it,
    just love me, daddy?

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      dude mike this is really good. take it from someone who was also abused....its not your fault. it takes a lot to realize that you are not to blame and you may even think that you are from time to time, but man you arent!!!!
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by trustnomore31 | [ Reply to This ]
      that's some heavy stuff!! you presented your questions in a most compelling way. i'm sorry you had to suffer abuse at the hands of your own father. of all things anyone may tell you about it, please KNOW and REMEMBER this: IT WASN'T YOUR FAULT!!! i just wanted you to know that because i was abused as well, and no one ever bothered to tell me that it wasn't my fault. i felt like trash, like i didn't matter and had no purpose in the world. YOU MATTER and you have a reason for being here! a great piece of writing because it takes a lot of courage to tell the world about the conditions which made you what you are. you can turn it all around and make something better out of what you got!
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]

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