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    Author: Silenced poet
    ASL Info:    21/male/oregon
    Elite Ratio:    2.54 - 52/41/21
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Rant/Serious
    Total Views: 997
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 547



    Description:
       just talkin shit


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    IS life always painful,
    or does the morphine help those in agony.
    the undefineabe burst of shaken harmony,
    yet the gods laugh in dismay at sex.
    FUCK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    come play the mind games of the forgotten children,
    and watch history burn.
    Not even death will stunt this,
    broken shards of glass that embed in clenched fists.
    sin, the sin of others is the effect of that in which all i have caused.


    Ploop!




    Submitted on 2006-05-10 12:47:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very powerful,
    You might want to re-word the last line its a little ...difficult compared to the rest, which is a lot of strong images and clear emotions. ( not the ploop part, the line before that ;)_
    | Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by ziska | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this, its very good. nice job.
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by josephina | [ Reply to This ]


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