Journey of (Rose) -------------------------------------------
into the blackness a seed is planted
time passes and nothing happens
surrounded by darkness
embedded in a cold void
you yearn to be free
of your current form
breaking through the layers
first of your shell
then that of nothingness
like a sudden strong gust of wind
you feel it
the sun
the rain
you move ever upward
towards the warmth of the light
bombarded by the liquid of life
with beauty unparalled
you reval in the notion of your
new found freedom
and the survival of your journey
the journey of Rose
I loved your poem...Journey of Rose...I like how you described finding yourself and who you are, as a rose being born, breaking through the layers to bloom...Nicely done....Wow and you wrote this in the 6th grade....Looking forward to reading more from you.... Desi
Welcome to Elite & nice piece!!! This is such a poem of freedom I loved it!!! The journey we are all on yet sometimes cannot adequately describe. Nice work & again welcome! Love, Peace, Joy!!!
Impressive piece, in the sense that you were a twelve-year old boy(or so) and that really means you were about eight and often I don't see stuff of this kind of maturity from eight-year olds. ;). Welcome to the site. Hope you like your stay here. The lines about beauty unparalleled or however you spell that I find really original. ;)
Submission Name: Journey of (Rose)
