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    dots Submission Name: girls night out -part 1dots
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    Author: shae_indauk
    ASL Info:    20.f.england
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 37/28/11
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 958
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    dotsgirls night out -part 1dots
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    next 2 hours will be crazy,
    but will not let this hype phase me,
    its a girls night out, and we do it write,
    we look hot yeah we look tight.
    Razz stop fussin your hairs real nice,
    and Shaz you look perfect every night.
    its these nights we have to just let loose,
    we are the hot gossip, the next days news,
    Ky our babyface. pretty one keep smilling,
    Natalie your our strong one, keep on protecting,

    those two hours were crazy,
    that was just getting ready,
    the night hasnt even begun,
    to the rtuck girls now run,
    skirts flying high in the rushing wind,
    then Razz says she's left her lippy behind.

    finaly arrive out side the club,
    Jam and Ray escort us into the hub,
    the dance floor is our girls, like it is every night
    so we show how its done, and keep the boys in our sight.





    Submitted on 2006-05-10 16:07:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey bubz, u k? i love this cant wait to hear part two, u never guess wot razz razz is doin at the mo! actualy you probably will, she has got one strand of hair outa line and she is flippin lol, i mite just go and pull it out lol,
    love ya
    ky
    x x
    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      party girls anthem huh? this was tight. i bet u have all kinds of craz azz stories about what goes down. keep having fun babe
    | Posted on 2006-05-13 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really out there but I love it! Sorry, if that seemed kind of negative. It's definitely inspirational poem. It describes the night and the importance it has on you and your girls. If you're going to have it rhyme, though, make sure it rhymes clearly with the next line. But besides that, great job.
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by rapius | [ Reply to This ]


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