Description: Don't know what to call this one ( any suggestions). The words just popped in my head and i wrote them down. Tell me what you think cause I don't know what to think.
hmmm, not sure what it is either, i do know that when i read the first little part i thought you were going to write 'as i walk through the valley of shadow and death...' so maybe you should change it. if you work on it, it oculd sound better, but as for now, it doesnt have much to it.
you should make it longer. it really seems unfinished. and I would reword the lines 'of the shadow/of my past'. they seem a little bit odd to me. maybe 'where the shadow/of my past sleeps' or something like that. it's a really good start, but it needs more.
Submission Name: untitled #2
