Give me a woman,
With whom to share my bed.
And a happy man I’ll be.
Give me a cunt
And a pretty face to look at
And I’ll stay there until I get bored
Give me a puppet,
Who bends to my commands,
Or I swear
I’ll turn my lust to the innocent.
Give me a warm place
To stick my dick
And never will I realize
That I’m hollow inside
Give me a foe,
Something to conquer,
And never shall I want.
Give me an assailant,
Whose blood I may spill
One who is as drunk as I.
Give me an outlet,
An unwilling sacrifice to rage
Or I swear
I’ll turn my rage to those I love.
Give me a body
To beat until dawn
And never will I realize
That I’m hollow inside.
| haha lol the title really did say enough, horny much? wow I'm actually impressed, a part of this from what I got was really putting yourself down....but if nothing else that compliments your intellegance...that you can see that what you are doing/want to do doesn't really make you anymore complete but is more of a distraction. This was definatly to the point but I kinda liked that, you didn't waste your time making it sound pretty, you just said what you wanted to. hmmmm do you want a one night stand that actually means something? I'm not totally sure but I kinda got a slight "me-against-the-world" feeling here. anyway good write I actually really liked something about this one that I can't totally point out.|
|| Posted on 2006-05-16 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ] || The connection between the poem and the title is simply excellent. Primal Urges...so..so *ROAR*... sorry about that don't know what came over me.|
I really like how blunt this was, how in your face and all that. Sounded the very basic instincts of a primitive man or who is to say, modern man.
I enjoyed this. I don't see anything I would change. Keep it up.
|| Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by Departed One | [ Reply to This ] || I say you are very horny my friend. This was graphic. I enjoyed it though. I sesne you want love or sex without the frills or games that come with it. Nice work. I liked the bluntness of this very much. You are on to something with this type of writing. |
|| Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ] || To be filled with lust and rage and wish to take out both upon. Hmm...a woman is in need as you say, but what if that woman whom your lust grows is that of your assailant or the sacrifice that must be made? Would you still be willing to sacrifice that one even if there is something that may change your mind from that lust you have for her?|
~Shakes his head lightly~ Yeah, don't mind me. That's just my mind working in odd ways. But anyways, your poem. It can be seen in it of the want and desire to do two things that have been known to be of great sins in the world. Lust and Taking Another's Life. Two sins in practically any religion or society, to where both can be punishable, or not at all. And even though you speak so highly of these throughout your poem, it only makes your craving for each grow and grow, and eventually could consume you to do something you hope not to.
Blah! Me and my damn mind working again. Well, what can I say? Its what I thought about when I read this poem, that's all. Anyways, I must be off now, so I'll take my leave. Farewell. ~Bows lightly~
|| Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by Noreu Hotishima | [ Reply to This ] || If you really want a cunt you better start saving gender reassignment surgery is very expensive jk/. Alright this is a bit crude but there are no illusion in it it's honest and i respect that. Preying on the weakness of others because we ourselves feel insufficient and it's easier to project than reflect. These sort of things occur far too often in the world. peace||| Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ] || Wow. This is a really aggressive kinda poem. It starts out with some serious desire for a woman and then move on to wanting an enemy to take out your rage on. Very interesting and I like the aggressiveness of this. I am not sure I agree with some of what you said in the first stanza, primarily because I am a woman, and I dont think any man should want a puppet. How boring. A strong independent woman is much more of a challenge...ok...I will not go on and on about that hee hee! But, overall, I do like the aggressive nature of this and yeah, very very blunt indeed. Sometimes blunt is good though. Clear and concise without all the bull[censored] isnt a bad thing. Very strong write. Take care.|
|| Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ] |