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    Author: Infected Mind
    ASL Info:    19
    Elite Ratio:    1.57 - 14/18/25
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    i see a phantom in the cemetery,
    she has told me what to do,
    i must not fret, be the least bit wary,
    for soon, i will reach you,

    i promise, i will find you my dear,
    i said, til death do us part
    while you are there, i am here
    the ending has begun to start

    i watch as the sun settles quickly now,
    ending whats left of the day,
    and as i sit, i can only find focus on how,
    time is slipping away,

    your eyes, your lips, your sweet embrace,
    fill my thoughts as i am subdued,
    not a single moment went to waste,
    i have given them all to you,

    for the rest of time until eternity,
    my love will burn forever,
    gave it all to have you here with me,
    you and i together...






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      aww. im ganna cry. thats really good. mikey ur imagery is great. even though you explained ur tru meaning to me, you can still get the point across without explanation. summing it up its all about undying love, but the picture in ur head is breath taking. i hope that love like that still exists not only with me and larry, but also with you and steph.
    | Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by trustnomore31 | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is very well done I must say! The meaning of this poem is basicaly everything I stand for when it comes to loving someone that why I apprciate it..It also reminds me of my own relationship my fave line of your poem is : while you are there, i am here the guy I love lives in a different place then I do and right now things are rocky between us but this poem made me feel alot better about it all anyways off to class I go! Peace out great poem
    | Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by Hip-Hop Honey | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is awesome!!! It's a testament to loving someone and putting nothing before them. True love is hard to find these days and I think you have really summmed up what a TRUE relationship should consist of .........undying love.

    Great write
    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by chrls | [ Reply to This ]


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