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    dots Submission Name: My Herodots

    Author: chrls
    ASL Info:    43/m/louisiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 43/56/16
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsMy Herodots

    Shaking hands and crooked back
    a shell of once what was
    Aging bones that creak and crack
    with shuffled steps that pause

    Once so young and full of life
    unlearned but not unwise
    Chose a trade and took a wife
    to love through lows and highs

    Children were an added joy
    to bring into the world
    First and girl and then a boy
    Lives not yet unfurled

    Jobs would come and jobs would go
    always worked so hard
    Pains that some would never know
    body bruised and scarred

    Suns would rise and suns would set
    all throughout the years
    I always tried to make you proud
    Many smiles and tears

    As time goes on these memories
    will always come to mind
    When breezes whisper through the trees
    These thoughts my heart will find

    Again a man as great as this
    the world may never know
    Side by side we did exist
    Daddy - I love you so

    Submitted on 2006-05-10 20:43:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a beautiful tribute to your father.. I like the message and theflow was great.,.. I know his heart will be touched each time he reads this.. who needs hallmark when god gives talent with words right?
    | Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh dear. This one actually made me shed a tear! Its so beautiful, I had to add it to my faves and I will be sharing this with my family when they get home. Keep writing knowing that this touched someone, and maybe your next works will too!
    | Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this was awesome. It was a great description of the way you adore your father. It was amazing...left me speechless!

    Nicely put together, and marvelous ways to describe his life and how much you love him...

    | Posted on 2006-05-10 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]
      I had no idea the poem was leading up to the last stanza...but it made everything fit together so well. This was very sweet. Glad you had the experience of having a father.

    | Posted on 2006-05-19 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]

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