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    dots Submission Name: Aching Heartdots
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    Author: iluvpoetry_1
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    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       u should totally see me rite now im like dancing in da chair its ridicolous!! haha! this is an old one that i found in da bottom of my backpack!! OOOOO OOO O OO O O OOO! ok im better!! um... i made guard im happy!! color guard is fun!! u should try it no matter how much ur school band sucks!! cuz ares does! ya anyway comment if u wanna its old!
    ~akaila~


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    dotsAching Heartdots
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    I want to see the blood
    I want to feel the pain

    This numb feeling of emptiness
    Needs to go away

    I need something or someone
    To help ease this pain that has
    corrupted my soul.

    I feel empty inside
    So lost and alone.

    I want my mind to give up
    I want my body to be release
    from the pain.

    Can someone help me?
    Can anyone hear my cry?

    I am screaming the scream of a broken heart.

    ~akaila~




    Submitted on 2006-05-11 21:24:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      very great flow, short but good... remember, quality, not quanity...lol, cya laters.
    -Austin-
    | Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by Linkins_knot | [ Reply to This ]
      ahh. u teenage girls and ur stories of woe. are ur lives really that bad? why were u so sad babe? u seem happy when i talk to u
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      LMAO I usually dont read other peoples comment but I did for some reason and I find it funny what unknown soldier wrote and kinda agree! U teens didn't live through nothing you don't know what heartache or depression is as when u get older it seems to double what you are going through now! Anyways keep up the excellent work,. peace & stay safe...
    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]


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