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    dots Submission Name: Just Like A Pilldots
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    Author: iluvpoetry_1
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 806/439/119
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       another old one i found!!
    ~akaila~
    im so hungry! i think this is love but i dunno tell me wat u think!


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    dotsJust Like A Pilldots
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    Once again I have failed
    Failed to fall for you again

    As I look deep into your eyes
    My self control begins to die

    Soon enough I find my self kissing you lips
    I find myself holding your body

    With one kiss I found myself
    burrying all the hateful things you said into the bottom of my heart

    I just wanted to beleive that you were the one. I wanted to feel your touch. I needed you kiss to mend my pain.

    But every kiss added more pain then what was already there. I see you and I want to run away from the memories of how bad you hurt me.

    I want you to be here with me but I cannot take all the pain that you endure in my heart.

    I am so confused. I want to hate you.
    You don't deserve me.

    So why am I back in your arms?

    ~akaila evonne~




    Submitted on 2006-05-11 21:34:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is one of the best ones that i think that i have ever read from ur old drug addicted azz. see just like a pill. it's even in the title that ur a damn druggie. ok this was good not only because of the wording but because it is kinda different from the stuff u usually write. this reminds me of the song by pink especially since it has the same title. pills are bad for u but u can't get enough of em
    | Posted on 2006-05-18 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      this is a good poem my only problem is your first two lines you tell how you failed to fall for him again and the rest of the poem contradicts that. i think the first two lines needs reworded and itwould be alot better. Hmmm i dont know.


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    | Posted on 2006-05-11 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL Again a nicely written poem! What else can I say about your poems but that they are all good! Hmm wish there was away for me to post one comment on all your poems because I am running out of nice things 2 say now I have 2 go back and use some old ones! I really like your poems! Peace & stay safe...
    | Posted on 2006-07-17 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]


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