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    dots Submission Name: Cindy Lee Pt 2dots
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    Author: orderly conduct
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 51/80/36
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Read part one first. Im not one for rhyming poetry but im trying it out.


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    dotsCindy Lee Pt 2dots
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    As you pluck the leaves from the invisible tree
    Cindy lee, I watched you from my balcony
    As you planted yellow flowers and danced by the mill
    I aimlessley wandered through the songs you have spilled
    We pushed the cotton deep into our ears
    breaking the drums and the skin
    to drown out your woes and swallow our sins
    Please stop wiping your tears on your small yellow teeth
    Your sweet little eyes, so much older than me
    They had died when we handled you with our foolish laughter and care
    They died and still linger near the tree's and the fair
    So i beg of you to stitch your eyes shut and not see
    What ugly words we made up, what ugly things we have been.
    You would lock your fingers in each hole and
    Continue to smudge the beads on the shore
    while we drew your face in the sand and
    scratched your heart on the skin that you grow
    Shamelessley we contracted our leftover names
    Painting your crushed fingers and pale yellow face
    Our curious breaths and dirty pictures drawn on your hands
    Of your mother, with no bones, under a cieling fan.








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      oh no. me and edmund talked about cindy on the bus. it's okay that we're not friends anymore. we can still make beau-tiful music to-gether.
    | Posted on 2006-05-14 00:00:00 | by denial | [ Reply to This ]


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