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Author: Linkins_knot
ASL Info:    14/Male/Behind a Computer
Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 20 /46 /19
Words: 265
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Average Vote:    5.0000
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im writing this with a help of a friend, plus im thinking of my girlfriend as well...


There was something missing in my heart
All of life began to depart
My hate began to go away
I’m aimed to the right way
My broken heart, my broken soul
You’re the one that filled it with gold

I stare into your eyes
I no longer wish to die
I feel like I can live
I feel I can survive
I’m meaning this, truth
You really make life soothe

The hugs are enjoyment
Life for me is no longer a disappointment
I can live happily now
Without myself feeling pound to the ground
Your touch is purity
Your nickname should be serenity

I’m lingered to the right path
Leaded away from bringing that world wrath
I wanted to create destruction and destroy the hated
No longer portrayed or demonstrated
I’m still vigorous and hasty no doubt
I no longer want the hated to cry and shout

The kiss is daring, exhilarating
Only if I could keep on breathing
The magic clears the taintness
I feel no longer heartless
The warmth cleanses the nightmares
They no longer plan dares

I’m beginning to built trust
It is not because of your lust
You helped me seize my fears
My eyes stopped growing tears
You’re my prosthetics, to help me
I’m happy I have found thee

I’m in your debt
I’m something you won’t regret
I will protect you as you have protected me
And that point will always be
I command myself to save you from death
Even if it brings me to my last breath…”

Submitted on 2006-05-12 00:19:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a very good poem. Yeah...thats all I had to say.
| Posted on 2007-06-12 00:00:00 | by Sushmister | [ Reply to This ]
  hey u!!! see i told u id read it!!! ur rite it is pretty long but its good!! im glad u found somebdoy that makes u happy and u feel like u can move on!!!
| Posted on 2006-05-26 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]

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