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    dots Submission Name: Seek Not My Heartdots
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    Author: WhErEaMi
    ASL Info:    16/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 35/38/24
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsSeek Not My Heartdots
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    Oh gentle winds 'neath moonlit skies,
    Do not you hear my heartfelt cries?

    Below the branches, here about,
    Do not you sense my fear and doubt?
    Side glistening rivers, sparkling streams,
    Do not you hear my woeful screams?

    Upon the meadows, touched with dew,
    Do not you see my hearts a'skew?
    Beneath the thousand twinkling stars,
    Do not you feel my jagged scars?

    Seek not my mournful heart kind breeze,
    For you'll not find it 'mongst these trees.

    It's scattered 'cross the moonlit skies,
    Accompanied by heartfelt sighs.
    It's drifting o're the gentle rain,
    A symbol of my silent pain.

    It's buried 'neath the meadow fair,
    Conjoined with all the sorrow there.
    It's lost among the stars this night,
    Too far to ease my quiet fright.

    No gentle winds, seek not my heart,
    For simply ... it has torn apart.





    Submitted on 2006-05-12 08:08:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a very beautiful poem. Lots of different word choices, and other things. It sounded Old English or Shakespearan to me, and that's great because many people do not write like that anymore, so now I see that it is trying to make some kind of comeback. This was very good,and I hope to read more by you.
    peace.
    | Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by Fusion | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow.... Really, wow. This is going into my favorites for sure. Its so unique and full of emotion. The flow was incredible! I hope you continue to right such heart felt poems dear, cause I need them to remind me of the wonders that can be written! Love it, love it dear.
    | Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      this is one of the most beautiful poems i think i've read!!! it flowed so evenly and consistantly. very intelligent writing and a touching description that leaves a thought provoking, lasting impression. way good work!!!
    | Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]


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