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    dots Submission Name: She Walksdots
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    Author: WhErEaMi
    ASL Info:    16/f/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 35/38/24
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsShe Walksdots
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    She walks along this lonely street
    no one to dry her tears
    massage her tired feet
    or calm ever present fears

    Seeing life through tainted heart
    making everything gray
    Alone, her life, anew to start
    Always searching for a way

    But life goes on no matter what
    That fact she cannot quell
    Memories ne'er to be forgot
    Within her heart they dwell

    So she keeps walking this lonely street
    Keeps searching to find her way
    Every night she lies down to sleep
    And prays tomorrow's a better day




    Submitted on 2006-05-12 08:19:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the simple rhyme. I like the layout. I like the meaning. Some of it seems a wee bit choppy but overall I like it.
    | Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by beldolore | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how this piece is hopeful, and not depressed suicide like so many on this site are. Nice job,


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    | Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by Glassy Eyed | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like your style of poetry on this piece. I mostly believe when you rhyme in poetry it gets a little cheesy but this was very tasteful. keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by TremendoCulo16 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was wonderful! It reminds me of how I felt when I was a teenager. I can relate. Keep up the great work!
    | Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by precious_poetry | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this one too. you seem to have a unique/peculiar style of expression, maybe solemnity describes it best.
    | Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
      the rhyme in this felt a bit forced, and it could habe been worded better, with a little polishing this could be pretty decent.
    | Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]


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