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    dots Submission Name: Washed Awaydots
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    Author: precious_poetry
    ASL Info:    19 F TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 137/145/67
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 933
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    Description:
       This is just a little doodle I wrote for my husband when we were having alot of problems. I named it Washed Away, because I felt the need to help my husband wash away all his fears and think only of what our love could get us through. Hope you like it.


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    Come and lie down beside me,
    And just listen to the rain.
    Clear your mind of things to be,
    Think not of the all the pain.

    Wrap your arms around my waist,
    Place your head upon my shoulder,
    Forget the obstacles we are to face,
    In our future, as we grow older.

    Close your eyes and hear my heart,
    Watch the rain, and hear the wind sing,
    Let the mournful times from you depart,
    Think of the love our future will bring.

    Fall into the place we belong,
    Where love never runs dry,
    Sleep as you listen to wind's song,
    Forget what it means to cry.

    Awake, my love, the rain has passed,
    Let us start the day anew,
    Cherish our love as long as it lasts,
    And we will always make it through.

    Mistakes were made, but they have gone,
    They vanished before our eyes.
    We've been given another chance today at dawn,
    To decide where our future lies.




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      I really have tears in my eyes. I am also 18 and married and I completely understand this feeling. You overwhelmed me, because I completely understand this emotion and this wanting and a new beginning. I am adding this to my favorites; I have never had my own feelings captured so well by another writer...
    | Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by beldolore | [ Reply to This ]
      that's very powerful stuff! i think we all want someone who will be with us no matter what happens. the things you said are precious and if more people loved as much as you and put that love into action, maybe more marriages would survive. those words are of great comfort, assurance and hope for your husband, and if i have't misinterpreted you, they invite him to love you and trust you completely because of your unconditional love...something we don't see much of anymore...
    | Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
      This was very very very VERY GOOD! I liked it a lot. It brought an image to me that I might tell you later because I cannot put it into words at this time. Very pure, original, and beautiful.
    | Posted on 2006-05-12 00:00:00 | by Fusion | [ Reply to This ]


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