This had some very good imagery. I really enjoyed the way you compared his love to a gun blast filled with deadly bullets. The wording was very good. I did though, did not like the last two lines. I felt it did not do this poem the justci it deserved. I would suggest maybe this:
Your gun was still smoking as you ran away. I wonder do you still pride yourself on being a man?
This is merely a suggestion. You do not have to listen to me at all. This was very good. I loved the way you wrote this. You just gave me a idea now for my next poem thank you! I enjoyed reading this. Keep up the good work.
Submission Name: Shotgun Love
