Subway

Author: Fraser ASL Info:    26 Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 30 /55 /35 Words: 115

Class/Type: Lyrics /Romance Total Views: 915 Average Vote:    2.0000 Bytes: 823

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Subway

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Verse Traveling down the subway people sit and stare at you traveling down that subway i see a girl as cute as you Chorus traveling down that subway speeding down that hallway Verse Speeding down the hallway she sits close and talks to you speeding down that hallway the doors are closed and she sing to me Chorus Bridge We're together with every move following the tracks in the grooves we move down that path so near moving along a hallway, clear Verse Moving in the tunnel our eyes meet so secretly moving down that tunnel we pass gifts of pleasentry Chorus

Submitted on 2006-05-12 18:57:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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I like the subway/hallway interaction...is this a Gentleman's Camp song? Either way, stretch it out. I feel like you've left me hanging....what happens with the subway/hallway love? Call me a prick, but the line: "We're together with every move, following the tracks in the grooves" might sound nice if it was "We're together with every move following the track in every groove" or something like that, a repeat of 'every'. The groove line is missing something, and it has the potential to be the best line in the whole song....

| Posted on 2006-05-24 00:00:00 | by Corvettlaufer | [ Reply to This ]

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