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    dots Submission Name: I think you might have lied...dots
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    Author: forevertorn
    ASL Info:    16.f.california
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 21/30/19
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 116
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    dotsI think you might have lied...dots
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    I lick my lips as I tremble,
    trying to hold it in.
    I try to stand but I stumble,
    yet again.
    My mind tells me what I'm seeing,
    it says, "never again."
    but instead I follow my feelings,
    and I can't hold them in.

    I know I shouldn't love you.
    I know my reasons don't make sense.
    I know I can't handle you.
    But without help I can't bring myself up again.

    I take a walk by myself,
    yet again.
    No one is here. I'm alone in this hell,
    so I pretend.
    I imagined that you looked at me,
    and said,
    "Everything is okay, I love you Cydney."
    but I know, you didn't say a word.

    I know I shouldn't love you.
    I know my reasons don't make sense.
    I know I can't handle you.
    But without help I can't bring myself up again.

    Please bring me up like you used to.
    Please hold me close, like you did once before.
    Please carry me, through the darkness.
    Please see me,
    Please love me...forever

    ...liked you promised you would...




    Submitted on 2006-05-12 23:10:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This write is really sad but you speak with such incredible emotion in this one
    I can feel your longing and I realize the pain You feel because I have felt it to
    The structure of this is perfect
    Great Job
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-05-13 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]



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