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Author: Star
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umm yea i kno it kinda doesnt flow well but tell me how you feel bout it so yeah thanks...


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She watched silently
as the ambulance drove away
carrying her mother from her

She saw people looking out at her
with worried glances
they let the curtains fall and walked away

No one could feel this torn up inside
She fell to the ground with tears in her eyes
Screaming and punching the sidewalk

"Why?" she yelled
Why did this happen
"Why?"

Her mother had choices
and made the wrong one
Which left her to fight with no one

Yelling and screaming echoed in her head
A slap across the face then nothing
She had looked over to see her mother had fallen

No movement
silence
Echos

She moved closer and
as she did she wiped the blood off her lip
shaking her mother with no avail

Mother?
MOTHER
gone away like everyone else




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  I'm afraid of losing my mom so I could see this happening to me. The feeling of responseability and abandonment flooded over me. I scared me and open my eyes a bit more.
*~Courtney~*
| Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by mcknight92 | [ Reply to This ]


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