Ecstasy Fades by Meckes

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Author:	Meckes
ASL Info:	18/M/NJ
Elite Ratio:	5.66 - 137/120/37
Words:	64

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	117
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	444

Description:
Today is the morning after my first experience with E... It was euphoric while it lasted... The come down was a brutal bitch...

Ecstasy Fades dots

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Like a shallow pond,
each ripple hits bottom
and the core is a party
without music or sweating,
ethanol fueled guests.

A buzz of lonely meets
every advancing thought
so that each crystal droplet
of joy condensed on the mind
heats to a thick black
vapor of anxious depression.

Choke-
lungs freeze as the
flames-in-pill-form hiss out.

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||| Comments |||
  I like the first two lines. To me, they signify the point wherein you allow yourself, or are forced to sport a certain level of sensitivity in order to feel something. There is a hint of desperation in it... a longing for the feeling of being alive. And anything would suffice.

To me, pieces like this are important for the one writing it because it is a first experience... a nameless disease (here I go again with this crap) and to be able to write something about it... to demistify it in a way that poetry does so well... gives the writer power over it.

Well, I think that this is a well written piece... overall. However, I do have an issue with the ellipses on line four. Wouldn't a space be better? An ellipsis gives it a skipped feel. Is that what you were going for?

Anyway... like I said... a well written piece... overall.
| Posted on 2006-05-13 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
  Ok, well I dont have much insight on this topic as I have never tried the stuff. But judging from your poem, it sounds just awful. It makes me wonder is it really worth it all? A party with no guests sounds like a really sucky party haha! And the last lines that speak of anxious depression, GEEZ, I cant think of any worse a feeling than that. I think you have done a fine job writing this one. You describe this experience very well with your words and really give the reader some good insight into this experience. Good write. Take care.

Lorna
| Posted on 2006-05-13 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  While I agree with Lorna on why someone would to to this to themself. as far as the reasons why people take the drug I can relate to it because I have many years ago done so many different drugs that I am amazed that I still breath today. Your description of coming down from the high is pretty accurate and you paint a very good picture of it too.

My feelings on why you would write this in the first place leaves me perplexed because it seems that you are proud of doing it or you think it is ok to do it. I for one cannot give you bad rap because of my own past.

Hopefully the description of the down will be a warning to other who might like to try it.

Anyways, again I think the write is very nicely done.

Clyde
| Posted on 2006-05-13 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]

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