Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • ES Magazine
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • Video Tutorials
  • RolePlay
  • 90% off Amazon
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Alonedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Ishtar
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 19/24/13
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 123
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 489



    Description:
       This poem was written after I broke up with my girlfriend, sad I know.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsAlonedots
    -------------------------------------------


    Before the dawn sleeps,
    I pray my secrets are yours to keep,

    As the night embraces the cresent moon,
    glorious and incomplete,

    I wait longing to shatter these walls,
    And break this world that continues to fall,

    Pulling, dragging, and beating my empathy,
    Until I am numb and there is nothing left within me,

    No words, no thoughts, no sound,
    Just the insantity that keeps me bound.





    Submitted on 2006-05-13 15:53:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      This was great!!! I really liked ur wording and imagery. I lalso liked all da personification u used...it was very well written and i enjoyed it very much!!!
    | Posted on 2006-05-13 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a good piece. I agree with broken that you conveyed a lot of meaning with very few words. There was one spelling error I noticed "draging" should be "dragging"..other than that it was great.
    | Posted on 2006-05-13 00:00:00 | by t0_eazy | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed the read, it is very much in keeping with my style, in that generally, you say a lot with few words. this shows the eloquence that heartbreak can bring to a shredded soul.
    | Posted on 2006-05-13 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]



    Full Anime Episodes Streaming Free
    5 million youtube videos all rated over 4.7 stars with 40+ ratings

    [ Copy this | Start New | Full Size ]

    Google
     

    [ Chrispian ] [ Write Forum ]
    [ Friends ] [ SNESroms ] .
    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry
    This user has been inactive for more than 5 days.