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Author: Nessus
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this isnt really a poem it is just what i was feeling and i needed to get it out


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i am aching to kiss you
i am longing to spend a few
minutes in your arms
just to know that you are near

my heart is breaking
this pain is making
me do things i dont want too
things that are filling me with fear

i want you to hold me
just so that i can see
that you still love me
i just wish that you were here

i love you




Submitted on 2006-05-13 16:55:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Is too a poem! But it needs a title!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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| Posted on 2006-05-15 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]


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