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Home (The Letter)


Author: BrokenStream
ASL Info:    019/f/NC
Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 83 /89 /66
Words: 217
Class/Type: Lyrics /Love
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I wrote a letter and I am waiting on a response...Its been a few days but I am hoping for the best


Home (The Letter)



I wrote you a note by my windowsil
It was probably the fifth draft
I had paper balls surrounding my desk
But still I wrote with a mission

It said that as days went by
I don't know why
I felt like I knew you
I would close my eyes
and see the part in your smile
and I felt at home...

It said that I really like your personality
and that you always made me laugh
too bad that I'm crying now
Where are you?
I need to reach you

It said that as days went by
I don't know why
I felt like I knew you
I would close my eyes
and see the part in your smile
and I felt at home...

When I finished I was overwhelmed
with joy yet with flutters
count the times you always wondered
what was inside my mind

It said that as days went by
I don't know why
I felt like I knew you
I would close my eyes
and see the part in your smile
and I felt at home...

And as I would seal it tight I would pray at night
I wanted you so bad
I didn't realize that you hypnotized my life
until I left home....




Submitted on 2006-05-13 19:20:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  it takes time to understand that there is a hollow within me, that i am alone and no one to wait for me. if its a dream wake up soon for love love will come only if you call him out, eyes can smile but not be there for you when words play the whole game for you. wonderful........ attempt and i really appreaciate the manner in which the thoughts have flown. you have kept the interest of reader intact. KUDOS
| Posted on 2006-05-13 00:00:00 | by ams | [ Reply to This ]


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